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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 18, 2014 21:53:08 GMT -8
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He was half-right...
The soul of the fiery NetNavi was as apparent in its brutality as the look in Megami’s eye. Just the sight of Brawn, a muscular NetNavi that looked like he could take a beating, gave her some indescribable joy that made Megami feel as if she found a suitable punching back. The moment the muscular NetNavi had drawn in close for the grab, the crater created had tossed her up slightly. She was still a little old thing, and so her feet lost contact of the ground, but she had not lost control of her now slightly muscular build.
“Guh! Strong!”
A mighty roar erupted from her lips as her right hand thrust out. A palm met Brawn’s grasp as Megami had kicked down her legs using them to get her footing. Her stomp caused her to create two craters around the point of her newly polished stiletto heel shoes and her arms bulged as she seemed to grapple with her right hand and the left swung to meet the wrist of the massive NetNavi.
“But we are way stronger together!“
Megami twisted her body to the right as she spun in motion while keeping her hand locked with brawn. Her shoulder and hips granted her power to shift her weight into a powerful throw of her body and aiming to take Brawn with her by throwing him over her arm and slamming him into the ground if she could. “Raaaaaaah!” The roar of the Goddess mimicked that of the Sun Goddess that was known for her brutality. Like a monster, Megami attempted to whip Brawn with nothing more than primal strength and mindless instinct of a gladiator.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
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Post by Kazu on Dec 18, 2014 23:16:16 GMT -8
Feeling his weight being shifted by the smaller navi, he pulled his wrist grappled arm to his side and shifted his weight with her so he'd easily go over her shoulder. He flipped right over her shoulder with a loud thud. Wide eyed, his upper body however lurched forward and he rolled after the impact to recover and break her grab, his arm and shoulder making a sickening pop as they did so. Right arms weren't supposed to bend that way.
She's actually got some muscle!
Now standing his large fingers flexed in his dislocated arm and with a grunt and quick turn it all popped into place, putting everything back to where it was supposed to be, each section of arm now burning from pain. His left leg made a sweeping motion to draw a line with his heel while his fists uncurled. He mimicked her taunt as he took a single (but very large) step back.
"Cross if you dare"
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 20, 2014 22:31:00 GMT -8
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“A challenge?” her brow furrowing as she given a glare that could pierce even Brawn’s brick-wall build, “Can I?”
Megami got down as if she was a football player on the line in the ready position. With her three fingers touching down, all she could think about was if she had the strength to do this without Xenneth. Had he been here, she would have charged without hesitation into the fray with his very being coursing through her programming: Full-Synchro. However, she stared and let that moment of hesitation be just that; a reminder that even alone, she would have to fight her way to him at times.
“I must!”
Although she thought this, a roar emitted from her lips as the line that Brawn traced into the ground became a crunch of the terrain as it was a memory beneath the leather clad female’s feet. Her body picked up as she approached Brawn, but not completely up right as she let her palms reach out intending to tangle with the NetNavi with both of her hands. Sure, there was his very own that she would have to worry about, and her breath was shown to be labored with every step.
With the bold, desperation of a wild boar, Megami charged in to grapple with Brawn for one last contest of strength. Without caution, Megami betted against the well chiseled athlete with her inexperience making victory uncertain.
Still, like her roar, her determination was loud and unwavering.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
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Post by Kazu on Dec 21, 2014 22:06:44 GMT -8
Instead of meeting Megami's grapple head on, he ducked under her and shot forward like someone initiating a tackle. Both arms wrapped around her midsection and pulled her in tight like a vice as they both came to the ground quickly with their combined weight. That didn't stop Brawn from his bear hug and trash talking.
TAP OUT B****, TAP OUT!!
His muscles bulged under his clenched teeth, veins pulsing as he began to shift his weight while carrying the smaller, bound navi.
TAP OUT OR GET BENT!
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 22, 2014 0:09:54 GMT -8
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Megami could not surrender! She did not know how!
No, literally! She did not know how! The phrase “Tap out” did not register as she was not good with slang. With Xenneth absent to explain it to her and not to mention the massive behemoth that had a hold to her body, chances looked grim. Even as she was wrestled to the ground and being squeezed, there was something in her that kept pushing her to fight. The will of Amaterasu’s very soul was strong; full of fight, Megami had grit her tooth as she endured the pain and let her instincts take over.
“Bend...I...shall...not!”
Megami abused the finer traits of being a tenacious woman in both the physical and mental. Anchoring herself as she stiffened her body, she resisted the cracking pressure as she wrapped her legs along Brawn’s side. Holding her breath keeping her chest tight and resting his head on her bosoms by squirming him into position, the female Goddess lifted her freed arms into the air and tightened her fists. The leather gloves gripping as if there were stones underneath.
“Solar...shower!”
Megami had thrust her hands downward from left to right. Even though this was a tough predicament to escape for her, she made sure it would be the same for brawn. With both fists aiming to strike at his head from left to right, Megami rapidly swung her arms while trying to keep her body tight. Her figure was still slim even if slightly muscular now and her bones were screaming from the strain as they were being crushed. Still, she did not give in as the rage of the fiery soul driven her to deliver the punches to Brawn like a rapid-fire force of meteors.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
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Post by Kazu on Dec 22, 2014 23:20:55 GMT -8
Brawn pulled no punches when it came to a fight, and if she could hit him while his bear hug crushed her between his arms, he could bite her...wherever his teeth and inch long tusks could sink themselves into. As she hit him on his head, his grip on his arms and her chest tightened until he had decided he had had enough.
With a muffled roar into Megami's body, his entire body shot upwards to get back onto his feet. Then, with a second roar he bent his entire body back as each of her Solar Shower hits struck him on the head. With her having the height advantage on him now, it was easier for him to swing back safely and drive her head first into the ground in a powerful suplex-takedown.
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 23, 2014 0:00:33 GMT -8
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Red stained white...
Droplets of data had imitated what was blood as it stained Megami’s face. The powerful suplex crashed her into the ground making all go silent after the impact. Her mouth hung open and there was only a finger twitch for a desperate motion unlike before. Her arms sizzled from the dying flames that wrapped themselves around them before, and Megami could make out the faint light from the overhead sun.
“G..... ....p!”
Give up? Maybe it was time to?
All the female NetNavi could feel as she curled her fingers with a flex was the tusks that driven into her body. The streams of data that flowed out was like a sweet release as she went partially numb. The sounds were as inaudible as the leather texture that squeaked with every movement. There was nothing now, just that voice telling her to...give up? No...great job? That didn’t end with a “p!” No...that voice riled the senses as her eyes that were half-close in a null shot open, her mouth breathed in a breath as if it were her last...
“If you die on me, I swear I’ll kill you!”
“Get up!” the whiney voice echoed through the mine, “”Get up! Get up! Get uuuuup!
The volume of the communication function on Xenneth's P.E.T. was set to full blast! Megami’s hands pressed upon Brawn’s head as her upper body struggled to push him upward and his tusk from her body. Her bones were crushed but body pressed as if they were held together by stubbornness and her will had become fueled by infinitely trivial thoughts about love, romance, and some false hope of marriage. Her teeth grit as her body scrunched up with her legs bending and her stiletto heels aiming to meet the mid-section of Brawn.
“I am up!” Megami cried, “Let us go, Full-Synchro!”
A flash of light burst forth from Megami’s body as well as twin rings of a blue energy raced around her.
Love, Loyalty, Laughter, Courage...
Virtues and values that were written in a barely deciphered Latin language had come as sudden as the monstrous strength that came from Megami’s body. Her pressed boots and pressing hands were fueled by unimaginable strength. “This talk ceases now,” she cried, “Farewell!” Megami kicked her body back aiming to catapult Brawn straight into the mind opening which he had previously sent her plummeting into.
With all her remaining strength, she aimed to settle things with a one final Hail Mary show of strength fueled by her bond with her loved one.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
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Post by Kazu on Dec 24, 2014 21:53:41 GMT -8
Well...Now we need a judge.
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Post by Kman on Jan 21, 2015 14:17:02 GMT -8
Offering to Judge. Talked to Div and he's cool with it, so if you're okay, Kazu, I'll get started on it.
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Post by Kazu on Jan 22, 2015 15:50:32 GMT -8
Fine w/ me.
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Post by Kman on Feb 9, 2015 10:08:20 GMT -8
Megami: Style: 24.75 / 30 Articulation: 15.625 / 20 Balance: 18.875 / 20 Length: 9.375 / 10 Emotion: 8.625 / 10 Judge Points: 8.75 / 10 Final Score: 86 / 100 Scoring Rationale: Style: It's actually really interesting to see Megami operating Solo. It's harder, it seems, to really get into the groove of how she operates without having Xenneth there to back her up. You sort of initiated a placebo with Amaterasu, but this definitely felt weaker than it normally does, without him there to back her up.
Articulation: There were a few times, as before, where fragments popped up, or some times where it seems like words were left out entirely, which made some sentences difficult to read. It wouldn't be a bad habit to pick up to read them aloud, to make certain that you're not missing anything when you're responding.
Length: This was pretty spot-on. Longer posts are both beneficial and dangerous as they allow you to get extra points with Style, emotion, and so on, but the longer it goes, the more chances of mistakes in articulation.
Emotion: As mentioned in Style, one can tell that you're used to writing both Megami and Xenneth together, and apart, they tend to suffer a bit. This was especially apparent near the middle of the RP, during the more intensive fighting scenes, where normally the two work as a unit.
Judge Points: I averaged your score, adding it to the judge points. (except for Post 4 with the Amaterasu Rising. I enjoyed that post immensely) By Post: Post 1:
Style: 27/30 Articulation: 16/20 Balance: 20/20 Length: 10/10 Emotion: 10/10 Judge Points: 8.5/10
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Post 2:
Style: 24/30 Articulation: 17/20 Balance: 18/20 Length: 10/10 Emotion: 9/10 Judge Points: 8.5/10
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Post 3:
Style: 25/30 Articulation: 15/20 Balance: 19/20 Length: 10/10 Emotion: 8/10 Judge Points: 8.5/10
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Post 4:
Style: 28/30 Articulation: 17/20 Balance: 20/20 Length: 10/10 Emotion: 10/10 Judge Points: 10/10
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Post 5:
Style: 24/30 Articulation: 17/20 Balance: 19/20 Length: 9/10 Emotion: 7/10 Judge Points: 8.5/10
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Post 6:
Style: 22/30 Articulation: 13/20 Balance: 18/20 Length: 9/10 Emotion: 7/10 Judge Points: 8.5/10
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Post 7:
Style: 24/30 Articulation: 14/20 Balance: 19/20 Length: 10/10 Emotion: 8/10 Judge Points: 8.5/10
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Post 8:
Style: 24/30 Articulation: 16/20 Balance: 18/20 Length: 10/10 Emotion: 10/10 Judge Points: 8.5/10
------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Brawn: Style: 25 / 30 Articulation: 16.125 / 20 Balance: 18.625 / 20 Length: 7 / 10 Emotion: 8.5 / 10 Judge Points: 8.25 / 10 Final Score: 83.5 / 100 Scoring Rationale: Style: Brawn is a brute, pure and simple. You did a fine job of exploring that as you went, and I enjoyed reading it. There were times were I felt like you were almost struggling to keep up the appearance of him being such, however. It felt forced instead of natural, like you were going out of your way to make him seem /more/ brutish just for the sake of being it.
Articulation: You tend to run a lot like I do with sentence structure, in that you craft exceedingly long sentences, often without any sort of stopping point, leading to the reader to have to pause and wonder where it might have supposedly ended and the next sentence began. It's a good rule of thumb to check and see if you've got more than 2-3 commas in a sentence, or you're breaking 13-15 words, to see about breaking it up.
Length: This kind of ties into the Style scoring. Most of the time, and as you got further into the RP it was more fluid, but there were times where it felt like you were trying to force Brawn's actions. I think he's a new character of yours so this might be part of the reason, but it affected the overall length as there were times were you weren't entirely sure /what/ to do wit him.
Emotion: This varied a bit. There were times were I could see Brawn vividly in his rage, and yet other times it seemed like he was projecting. Like most of the rest, you started getting a better handle on him as you went, and I think that in the future he'll be a definite more fun to read.
Judge Points: I averaged your score, adding it to the judge points. (except for Post 2 with the crushing of the rocks to use as dust. Very nice.) By Post Post 1:
Style: 20/30 Articulation: 13/20 Balance: 20/20 Length: 6/10 Emotion: 7/10 Judge Points: 8/10
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Post 2:
Style: 24/30 Articulation: 13/20 Balance: 20/20 Length: 8/10 Emotion: 8/10 Judge Points: 10/10
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Post 3:
Style: 27/30 Articulation: 16/20 Balance: 12/20 Length: 9/10 Emotion: 9/10 Judge Points: 8/10
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Post 4:
Style: 24/30 Articulation: 17/20 Balance: 20/20 Length: 5/10 Emotion: 10/10 Judge Points: 8/10
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Post 5:
Style: 23/30 Articulation: 15/20 Balance: 20/20 Length: 7/10 Emotion: 8/10 Judge Points: 8/10
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Post 6:
Style: 25/30 Articulation: 17/20 Balance: 20/20 Length: 8/10 Emotion: 8/10 Judge Points: 8/10
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Post 7:
Style: 28/30 Articulation: 16/20 Balance: 18/20 Length: 6/10 Emotion: 9/10 Judge Points: 8/10
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Post 8:
Style: 29/30 Articulation: 16/20 Balance: 19/20 Length: 7/10 Emotion: 9/10 Judge Points: 8/10
The winner by a narrow margin, Megami! You both have a lot of room to grow and I'm excited to read other Roleplays in the future! I'll leave you two to sort out the winnings for now, and of course, the +5/+50 if you want to finish it. Also- it has been clarified that the 5/50 per post is only for Battle Posts, so the intro ones wouldn't count for such.
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