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Post by sora001 on Mar 12, 2012 20:03:21 GMT -8
Location: Creamland (after AA) Posts: 2 Intro, 8 Battle Judgement: Single, requesting Version Bonus: On ------------------------
[Enter the darkness]
A black, shining, beam of energy shot towards the ground. When the beam impacted, a red-clad navi was standing in it's wake. Long, black hair flowed in the wind, and eyes of deepest red shone from behind the rising dust. Just who is this navi, this mysterious creature of the dark? There's only one way to find out...
(1/2)
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Post by Team Active Star on Mar 14, 2012 16:07:28 GMT -8
V bonus on? K. Shadow is v2
When the beam of energy landed and formed into the navi, another navi was already in the area. He had heard of a massively powerful being had recently been here, and in his quest for power decided to investigate, and see if he couldn't benifit somehow from it.
The sound of the navi entering the area though was unmistakeable, causing Shadow to turn around and face this new arrival, sizing him up as he looked him over. He felt the navi was of no real threat and chuckled darkly to him self. "What brings you 'round here buddy?"
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Post by sora001 on Mar 14, 2012 16:39:01 GMT -8
"Buddy? Do we know each other that well?"
After asking this, the darkling would change form, into a swarm of bats, which seemed to fly up into the moonlight. They then took their place behind the one who had addressed the darkling, and gave shape to it once more.
"Or is that how you greet people you've only just met?"
Saying this the darkling would again disappear into the swarm of bats.
"Either way, I find it somewhat interesting."
The swarm had not left, and they spoke as one, one conciousness that was their master.
(I2/I2)
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Post by Team Active Star on Mar 14, 2012 18:29:40 GMT -8
Shadow watched as the navi shifted forms and moves behind him. He turned his head to watch the navi with one eye as he spoke. Not in the least bit conserned yet. As the strange navi shifted forms again, and finished speaking, and remained flying there, he finally turned to face the strange 'creature' as he thought of it at the moment.
"Ha, you couldn't tell sarcasim if it bit you in the arm. Obviously you are not my "buddy". I would never call you such." No longer interested in the strange navi he turned his back to it once more, continuing his search. Before he took more then two steps though he turned his head slightly and called back towards the navi once more.
" Do your self a favor, and keep outta my way shrimp."
[Intro 2/2]
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Post by sora001 on Mar 14, 2012 20:48:03 GMT -8
"You would dare to turn your back on me?!"
Enraged by his interest's spurning actions, he commanded the swarm of bats to swoop down upon the navi, and bite at him viciously.
"THIS IS ONLY THE BEGINNING OF YOUR PAIN!"
As most of the bats continued biting at Shadow, a hand formed in the air, from the combination of around 10% of the vermin. A yellow glow developed in the hand as the creatures continued swarming the navi. Only when the bats left was the true shape of the light source revealed. In the airborn hand, was a bright bolt of lightning, which was then cast straight down upon the navi.
(Battle 1/8)
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Post by Team Active Star on Mar 15, 2012 8:51:29 GMT -8
Shadow's eyes flashed with an eerie glow of purple, a lust for battle calling out to him from with-in his soul, as the navi shouted at him. He truly did not know what he was getting him self into did he?
Then suddenly, as Shadow began to turn about to answer the navi's call, he Was swarmed by the bats, all trying to bite him at various points on his body, thwarted for the most part by his thick armor he wore. When the bats backed off, his attention immediately turned to the hand glowing with energy, and wasted no time in jumping back, narrowly avoiding the bolt of energy that struck where he once stood.
Shadow now stood a few feet away from the swarm of bats, and the floating hand, his armor covered in nicks and scratches from where the bats tried to bite him. He stood there for a moment, not moving, and slowly let a smirk creep across his face. It was then that the navi would feel a chill, not a literal cold per say, but a icy presence that would make even the most seasoned warrior shudder.
Then there was movement. On Shadow's back, a large cannon unfolded and rested upon his shoulder, a large revolver like chamber near the base. A low whine could be heard as energy began to be charged into two of the chambers, building up power for a strike later. Then the chamber spun slowly, clicks heard as he cycled through the rounds. Finally he found the one he wanted, and another louder clanking noise rung out. And then what sounded like an explosion. The shell erupted from the barrel, and flew straight towards the strange being he was now engaged with. As the shell reached the rough epicenter of the swarm, it exploded, sending razor sharp shrapnel flying amidst the bats and hand.
It was now that he finally decided to speak once more. His voice laced with a chilling undertone. " I warned you kid, now...heheh...I will tear you to little pieces."
[Battle 1/8]
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Post by sora001 on Mar 15, 2012 9:29:06 GMT -8
As the shrapnel exploded outwards, the bats were transformed into what looked like blood, which gathered once more behind this fairly interesting navi.
"Well, dear one, now that I've got your attention, I can show you every one of my little tricks."
A short giggle could be heard if you were standing close enough.
"Besides, I don't want you out of my life just yet sweetheart."
After saying his piece, shade backed up a bit, and the same sort of mechanism that Shadow had, was forming in the same location on shade.
"Oh, that's right, you might know this one already."
The weapon finished forming, and immediately began charging energy. While it was charging, Shade targeted Shadows midsection, and selected the explosive round.
"Bye hun, it's been so nice."
The weapon fired the round with excessive speed, right at the other navi's chest. A split second from impact, it detonated, likely knocking shadow back a good distance without killing him.
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Post by Team Active Star on Mar 15, 2012 10:50:52 GMT -8
Shadow paid little attention to the words the strange navi said. His mind was focused on the battle now, the one thing he enjoyed more then anything in life. Shadow didn't bother moving as the navi took form again, and even mimicked his own cannon. He heard the familiar clicking sound of the chamber rotating. Then it fired.
Shadow seemed to have no qualm taking the hit. As the round screamed towards him, he tensed his legs, and leaned forward, allowing the shell to explode almost against his chest. The force of the blast slammed into his body, pushing him backwards several feet, the ground cracking and buckling under his feet as he slid, leaving a visible trail from where he once stood.
Somewhere previously before the blast, Shadow had closed his eyes, which he now opened, a gleam in them as he stared back at his opponent. His armor had several pieces of metal embedded in it, and a small trickle of blood ran down his cheek from a small cut from one of the pieces of shrapnel. He ignored this though, and instead continued to build up energy in his cannon. The whine steadily growing as it neared full charge on one of the shells, and over half on the last.
At this point shadow ignited his arm mounted blade, the blue blade of energy, while thin, hummed with a dangerous energy. He cocked his arm up in front of him, the hilt of sorts almost covering his face. His face still wore the evil smirk, even as he spoke. "You dare think you can beat me with my own attack? Hahahaha....AHAHAHAHA!! YOUR PATHETIC!"
As Shadow continued laughing his voice started to echo, and his entire body faded from sight. Then all was silent. The few seconds of silence dragged on, feeling like minutes, the icy chill in the area intensifying as Shadow was out of sight. Then suddenly, Shadow was no longer invisible. In the blink of an eye, his cloaking vanished, revealing his position, being right in front of Shade, his blade already mid swing, leaving not time to react as the blade neared his chest, it already being meer inches away...
[Battle 2/8]
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Post by sora001 on Mar 15, 2012 12:33:07 GMT -8
Shade had little to no time to react. He moved backwards quickly, but the attack still hit him. His left hand had been completely severed from his arm, but it was not completely useless.
"My my, so the little boy has some fire in him."
As if taunting his opponent, he transformed into a swarm of bats once more, resting one atop Shadows head. The rest of the small creatures formed into multiple hands, surrounding the combat navi. Each hand glowed a brilliant yellow before forming the weapon of the ancient greek god of gods. All at once, the bolts were launched directly at Shadow. A deafening crack could be heard as they tore through the wind towards their target.
""Don't worry dear, I'll be sure to treat you extra special."
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Post by Team Active Star on Mar 15, 2012 13:44:50 GMT -8
Ooc: wasnt expecting to lop off a hand>.>
Shadow continued chuckling as his blade cut through Shade's wrist, the blade slicing through surprisingly easy, he thought. But he didn't dwell on the matter long, for the navi was already on the counter attack.
Shadow twitched slightly as one lone bat perched it's self upon his head, but paid it no mind as the rest of the swarm morphed again, forming several of the hands once again, all glowing with power as they prepared to strike. Shadow made no attempt to dodge, as doing so would be futile with that many blasts. Instead he crosses his arms over each other in front of himself, and widened his stance, bracing himself for impact. Right before they fired, his armor began to glow though, shining with power as he activated one of his internal protective protocols.
The clap of thunder was loud, deafening even as the lightning bolts all converged on Shadow's location. As the dust settled though, Shadow remained standing, and didn't look much worse for wear then before, the glow around his armor having vanished fully.
Shadow uncrossed his arms, his face darkened, as if burnt slightly. His cannon clicked once, switching to another special shell, which had just reached it's peak charge. It continued to whine as it finished the other charge. Still surrounded by the strange hands, shadow opted for his alternate method of delivering his attack.
The cannon barrel swung up, aiming to the sky, and with a resounding 'boom!' And a flash from the muzzle, he launched a shell high into the sky. It took a few moments, but it quickly reversed direction, coming down almost directly over Shadow. He seemed to not be worried though, standing there, with a smug grin on his face.
Then, it happened. The falling shell burst a few yards over head, sending out a concussive blast of energy through the area. This initial blast though was quickly followed up with three more successive blasts, bathing the area in an oppressive power as each wave rippled forth from the exploding shell.
[Battle 3/8]
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Post by sora001 on Mar 20, 2012 11:43:50 GMT -8
[Shade.EXE Deleted]
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Post by Team Active Star on Mar 20, 2012 11:52:56 GMT -8
....ok? O.o
Uhhhh guess we get a judge or how does this work...?
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Post by Kman on Mar 20, 2012 13:41:31 GMT -8
I s'pose I'll judge what there is XD;
Shade vs Shadow, eh? Interesting matchup :P
Style: Shade: 24/30 - I dug it, though there was some inconsistency in Shade's personality. I think once you can get it narrowed down, it'll be pretty solid. Shadow: 26/30 - Watch dem grammar/spelling things, mang. Shadow's got style, but they detract from the overall quality if they're lurkin' around.
Articulation: Shade: 15/20 - Overall it wasn't too bad. One thing that I was hoping for more on that wasn't provided was the skill where you copy Shadow's move. You could've gone into some srs details about the mechanics of it, and I was a little let down that it wasn't there : / Shadow: 19/20 - That shoulder cannon is BA, and the line where the arm-blade was ignited was neat: "...hummed with a dangerous energy." I dig it.
Balance: Shade: 19/20 - I wasn't so sure after avoiding the shoulder-cannon, but more than made up for by the loss of a hand. /approve Shadow: 19/20 - Took some damage, dished out more; pretty solid.
Length: Shade: 6/10 - This is probably your weakest area; you have a lot of room for improvement in length/description. There was enough there to move the story along, so I'm not penalizing too much here, but if you can improve this, you can get points in Articulation too, and Style as you have more room to show off what Shade can do. Shadow: 9/10 - You got this, brah. I'm with Gen on this 'un though: no such thing as too long :P
Emotion Shade: 7/10 - What was there was good, but like I mentioned before, he starts out kinda...well, he starts out like Energeist and ends like Xyzillientz. Shade needs his own voice, and once you find it, you've got it. Shadow: 8/10 - Shadow's battle...ness, his love for battle, could be hit a bit more. He seems like the kind who's completely lost in the chaos of a fight at first, but then seems to stay cool and collected later.
Judge Points: Shade: 7/10 - Shade has 5 letters in his name, +2 for the amusement of the names being similar Shadow: 8/10 - Shadow has 6 letters in his name, +2 for the amusement of the names being similar
Total Points-
Shade: 78 Shadow: 89
A winner is Shadow!
Winner: 70/700 (Base) Loser: 35/350 (Base)
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