(Halloween theme for this battle since the holiday is coming up.) Location: Forest Net Posts: 1 Intro, 5 Battle Version Bonus: On Judgement: Single (Requesting)
((OOC: <> = internal monologue.))
<Now, I know what you’re thinking: “How did all this come about?” Well, it all started on a midnight stroll through the woods. The air was clear, the moon was full. I was dying to sink my teeth into something. Get it? Because I'm a vampire. Mu-ha-ha-ha-ha-ha… It’s funny.>
"Hm....wish I had something to do right about now."
Kidd had come straight to the forest net for some reason after finishing his Vampire costume. Perhaps he planned to scare a few navis before heading back to the base. After all, part of 'Trick or Treat' is Tricks. So, as he sat in the branches of a tree and waited for some unwitting navi to pass by, he pondered just how he would go about alleviating his boredom. These thoughts were interrupted however, as Kidd fell out of the branches and landed on his head.
"Well, that wasn't exactly part of the plan."
As he stood, he dusted himself off and leaped back into the branches of the same tree.
Post by Hellbreaker on Oct 14, 2015 7:44:43 GMT -8
The moon grinned wickedly upon spooky, delightfully frightful scenes. Jack'O'Laterns cackled with flaming eyes, and all manner of creatures roamed, intent upon devouring that which was sweet and succulent... Especially sweet.In this night of fear and fun, there where many tales wanting told...
But, for the moment, we'll focus on one tale in particular, one of an encounter between a vampiric, rather cool gunman and a brain dead rapper. No, really, Rap was dressed up like a zombie, as was his Op. The navi shambled, groaning towards the tree, until he sees Kidd fall from it.
He pffts, then busts out laughing. The relaxed voice of his op speaks out."Rap, chill, it wasn't that funny." Rap shakes his head, Hus eyes gleaming in amusement."I..heehee, know, but the thought of a vampire not being able to fly..hahaha..amuses me, I guess that's why!" The musician waves a friendly hello to Kidd.
Post by Hellbreaker on Oct 14, 2015 10:02:25 GMT -8
Rap blinks as the navi jumps down, challenging him to a spar, then grins, glowing lines appearing on him as he hops in place."I'll give it a try, hope I don't cry!!" He yelps, narrowly dodging the shots. The navi deploys his mic as it glows red and looks at Kidd."I'm Rap, got the flows to make everyone clap!!!" He raises his mic, grinning, then demonstrates why they call him Rap.
"Look at this pointy fanged wannabe, wanting to step into the ring with me. Do-rae-me, I'll hammer you by the count of 1-2-3. I'm a straight up cannibal, taking bytes out of you like a animal! I spit bars so sharp they cut the air, go ahead and counter if you dare!!"
As he raps, a huge hammer drops down towards Kidd as bear traps erupt out of the ground. Appearing the air before Rap, razoredged spikes shoot towards his opponent.
Post by Hellbreaker on Oct 14, 2015 11:17:43 GMT -8
Rap yelps, dancing aside as bullets come down.Stung by the comment, he fires back."Not my fault I'm a beginner, just you wait till I show you I'm a winner!!" Seeing the attacks coming towards him, the navi gulps, raising his mic."Did I mention, that I'm protected by a shield of redemption?" The bullets obscure the area, but soon the mist fades, revealing Rap in a solid, but much cracked sphere of energy.He breaths out, then launches his next wave of attacks.
"Doesn't matter if its Christmas or Halloween, I got the wicked rhymes to make everyone scream. You're gonna need a healing shower, if you go against this Pyscho!! If you think you can win you're more barking mad then Cugo, yet ironically your bites lack power. Your arms lack the range to trade blows, Mine are infused with my soul!!"
A banshee forms in front of Kidd, launching a dizzying scream as a indistinct figure slashes at the gunner. There's a growl, then a ghostly dog leaps at him, biting at him with very solid fangs. The last attack was a huge fist made of energy whistling at Kidd.
Kidd fell from the tree, landing on his back, but was able to get right back up again.
"Your rhymes are weak, they have no rhythm. So shut your beak, as I hit'cha with these little Ice prisms."
As Kidd layed it out for Rap, he started firing again, while running around him in a circle.
"I think someone needs to learn how to spell, I think you meant Cujo, that's the dog from hell. You think you got me beat, as you summon these things, But your attacks are weak, weaker than my smokescreen!"
The bullet storm continued as Koga kept up the flow.
Post by Hellbreaker on Oct 14, 2015 13:43:21 GMT -8
Rap blinks as Kidd begins rapping."Y-you can rap?" There's a pause, then he leaps around, grimovements,itedly."Awesomeawesomeawesome, I knew this'd be fun!!" The bullets clash against the shield, and he yelps as it shatters, dodging around frantically.Rap raises the mic to his mouth.
"La-di-la, look who's the clever one./Indeed you're a genius! It takes real brains to spit insults meanest/Yeah, I'm sure you think you've won. Yet its me that's pulling out the references/Its me putting these rhymes together with stitches! Your rhythm is slimy, your flow grimy/ And yet you fail to kill a zombie. We're both both dressed as creatures who's hearts don't beat/ but you're the one who's dead weight, dead meat!! How can you hope to win this/ when my rhymes are endless? Welcome to the rise of the walking dead!/ Looks like I'm ahead!!"
Threads appear on Kidd's limbs, attempting to restrict his movements as slime forms under his feet.A weight, the bottom patterned after a meat tenderizer, forms above, then falls.
Two navis, rapping in the middle of a forest while fighting. Some might find it odd, but these two were really giving it their all.
Kidd took the hammer to the head, but then launched himself right at Rap, punching at his mid-section repeatedly.
"You think you'er clever, I'm a vamp that's bullet proof. And when I raise my hands up, the fans go through the roof, Your mouth keep's movin', but you haven't learned a thing, you might wanna hold tight, 'cause this is gonna sting."
After the flurry of punches finished, Kidd back flipped to gain distance before shooting a high caliber round right at Rap's chest.
"Now I'll admit, you're doin' better than before, But this fight'll still end with your face on the floor, But I'm not done yet, and this you should know, Because I got two guns, get ready for the show!"
And almost as if on cue, the other gun appeared from Kidd's other sleeve. He moved in a circle again, but this time he was jumping from the ground, to the trees, then back to the ground in a cycle as he fired at Rap.
Post by Hellbreaker on Oct 14, 2015 16:24:18 GMT -8
Rap blinks as Kidd launches at him, punching him repeatedly, before moving back to shoot his chest. As the navi staggers back, crying out,the gunner shoots him some more, sending Rap falling over. Vox speaks out."Hold on, Rap, I'm pulling you out!!! " Rap shakes his head."N-no...just...give me a beat." "You sure?" The blue haired navi grins, nodding as he puffs into the ground."Y-yeah..." "....Aight..." A second later, sound pours out from nowhere.
Rap gets up slowly, looking intently at Kidd, then...begins.
"I am alpha and omega, beginning and end/ I am he who has not yet sinned. The fire is pulsing hot, I can't find the will to stop/ so maybe I'll push till I drop. Tell me, can you speak and have the world deform to your wish/ Can you bring forth holyness? Im a miracle, something spiritual/The power of my very soul ensures I needn't get physical.
These bars I spit,damage do inflict./ I weave a tapestry of violence with my very voice, when it comes to blows I have my pick. This before you is the product of a genius/ I refuse to let this battle be your easiest! With my vocal spell/ my enemies I quell. So its time to go to town/ brace yourself, I'm about to cut you down!"
A fire flares up from beneath Kidd, and a faint hand rushes at him with great force. A angelic figure appears, healing up some of Raps wounds as bars shoot towards Kidd, invisible fists slamming into the gunner. Finally, razor edged discs shoot towards him.
The flames singed Kidd a bit, and he did feel some pain from it, but nor more than normal. The rest of the attacks didn't phase him much.
"Didn't you hear me before? I said that I'm bulletproof! You must really not like hearin' the truth. Now I know you really got this cat in the bag, But I really got a say that you're too green to brag, Now I'm sure you thought it was destiny, that you'd be rappin' for eternity, but you really screwed up when you tangled with me, 'cause you underestimated my skillz, ya see?"
Kidd unleashed a hellish storm of bullets as he moved through the trees, moving between them, and the ground, and even throwing in some aerial acrobatics as he made linear movements across the circular area every so often.
"These words of yours hurt me as much as your attacks, with little scratches like these, I should probably chillax, but there's something I know, something that I can show, this battles almost over and I'm sure you've had enough, you could easily quit now and you'd still look tough, you fought with one of the best, to that I can attest, but now one of us has to bow out, and this ain't no jest."
Post by Hellbreaker on Oct 14, 2015 19:01:11 GMT -8
Rap's jaw dropped, seeing that there was still barely a scratch on him. How the heck...He nods as Kidd begins rapping again, giving a encouraging thumbs up, then blinks. Wait..he should probably get ready to dodge.."ARRRRGH!!!!"
And yep, there are the bullets. The zombie costume was even more tattered, filled with bullet holes as Kidd hammers Rap.One could suppose this was one way to get into the spirit...Rap weaves in place, plopping down on his butt and leaking data."O-one more, then I'm done..."
"Its not much, I'm lunch/but I can still hit you with the one two punch. I swear, I'll become the nets next Amadeus/ I'll wind up the greatest.. Everyone will have me and Vox on their playlist/ Everyone will know my alias.."
Two invisible fists slam into Koga, then Rap flops backward, lying down and huffing. "T-that was a good performance... Thanks for the opportunity."
(OOC: The moment you all have been waiting for-! And by 'you all' I mean 'You,Koga'. :P )
Kidd vs Rap RP Battle analysis
Style seemed decent on both ends. Certain wordings could be better than the sound effects used, but that didn't take away from the sights and sounds made visible during the battle.
Beware of typos...as miniscule as they may seem they can still affect RP a bit.
The rapping segments were mostly well-done, minus a few misses here and there where it...didn't quite seem like the lines fully flowed and matched each other.
And sometimes the rapping seemed a little....long-winded.
Also, certain words that follow 'A' don't seem to work well together. Basically, if a sentence starts with 'A' it helps to follow it with a word that has a consonant, not a vowel, by the way. (example is like 'A pen' in contrast with 'A elephant'. Might just be me, but it doesn't mesh together in that second example.)
Kidd: 23 points
Rap: 21 points
Reiterating the usefulness of describing certain sounds or if they are used they're a bit better suited used in speech. Like having a character verbally go 'Pshh...' is a bit better than saying 'A Pshh escaped his lips in response'.
Aside from that, articulation was pretty good on both sides of the spectrum in this battle.
Helps to differentiate between certain methods of blocking too, by the way.
The slang seems fitting too, though if readers didn't know that 'bars' means lyrics I imagine people would PROBABLY think you mean he was literally using a spitting attack...
Responses to attacks helps too, like if a character sustained a hit, did they just stand and take it directly? These help in Roleplaying.
One side seemed more balanced and believable, but maybe because one side actually has stats...and the other doesn't.
A few moments seemed like a HyperMode and such too...a bit out of reach, if you ask me. And elements being used that aren't accessible to that side,too. At one point, one side seemed to have 3 attacks dished out as well...without any indication of a boost.
Hard to believe either side would only use one method of attack too...though at least it was more than moderately done right, staying in character arsenal-wise.
Kidd: 18 points
Rap: 11 points
Both of your posts were of decent length. It didn't feel as if they were too long...and I thank you both for that.
But one of you kept the lengths up more than the other, thus the close score here.
In the latter part of the battle they did seem a liiittle long, but I contribute that to both sides having fun with the rapping. And because it didn't start to feel like a snoozefest, no penalty there.
Fair amounts of surprise and emotion from both Rap and Kidd...one side definitely seemed to express more though.
There didn't seem to be much emotion here...I suppose since it was mostly a rap battle than fists and busters.
A decently carried out battle. You're both commended for keeping the flow going and maintaining good sentence and posting structure, including paragraphs, of course.
Beware of run-on sentences, even if they aren't spoken such things aren't encouraged when writing. Punctuation indicates taking a breath while talking...even if a navi was a motormouth.