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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 3, 2014 16:41:21 GMT -8
~I-Am-Rosetta~
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"No! No! No!...Isolate the infection....Isolate the infection....Isolate the infection....Isolate the infection....Isolate the infection....calm down"
“Need some sanitizer for that?”
A witty comment as Nu lunged forth, Rosetta did not even think about how twisted she was becoming in her pursuit. It took only one inconsistency to bring her back to reality: the explosive outcome of B.O.B.’s counter! The backlash caused Nu, of all programs, to be surprised.
“Nu-chan! Move!!!”
Her eyes widened in disbelief as she nearly was pulled directly into the chaos. The only thing that saved the NetNavi was she breaking off a portion of her body to negate the damage, but still drained her own ability. The blob-girl slumped back as if she was dazed and confused (which she was). A portion of her body and potential was sucked in to the devastation and it took her a moment to recover fully as she clasped her hands open and shut as if she was regaining control of her body.
“Be more careful,” Rosetta warranted, “Do not lose control.”
She was right. Nu could feel the instability as even her own body became pixels at her right arm, torso, and right ankle. With a straining tense of her body and a grit of her teeth, Nu had focused to make the anomalies on her body cease as if she healed instantly. It was only because of her quick regeneration rate and her high defense that she was resisting the decomposition, but she still had her limits...and that made her frown since no mediocre NetNavi would remind her of that! No matter how high their analytical ability was.
Slowly, Nu’s body melded back into the building’s side as if it was a thin envelope of slime and she would become it’s brain once more.
“Fine,” Rosetta’s voice rung throughout the building and monitors eroding from the bug-like infection, “You are a very capable NetNavi, I will admit that. But you can’t escape, Nu. You’re just not as strong as us.”
The glare behind the glasses vanished, enough to show a genuinely sad expression.
“Just let my friend assimilate you. It would be a shame if you were to perish in this building. Don’t you see? This is what’s best for everyone. ”
She said this with the most truest of empathy in her voice. Behind her spectacular brain’s processes, she managed to see all of this as reasonable. The sacrifice of B.O.B.? Every bit logical! He was to perish...no...every one were to perish eventually with what was to come. With that, young Rosetta had gave a weak sad smile displayed on the hall aligned with monitors but riddled with bits of static showing how weak her control was. She earnestly awaited a reply while Nu’s very body crept along the facility slowly trying to regain control and recover her lost strength.
The monitors flickered between the remaining ten minutes of time, static, and the lowly sorrowful face that awaited a reply.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
Now Playing: ”Wiping All Out” from Persona 3: OST Chatty Ditz: I think I disorganized my posts. I forgot to change that my second post was the first one since Nu was trying to lock you in. Ha!~ Post Number: F.I.V.E.
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 3, 2014 17:15:38 GMT -8
B.o.B. kept moving making its way up the building. As fast as it could. Its internal repair programs working overtime to try and hold off the spread of the bug data and repair B.o.B.'s arm.
"Keep moving...analyze the situation and adapt..."
B.o.B. slowed just a bit to see that the infection had slowed just a bit."She must be straining herself to keep control over this entire building..."B.o.B:"I appreciate the compliment, but you are still underestimating me..."
As B.o.B. turned down a long hallway filled with monitors, this area must be some what close to the ground floor lobby. Rosseta's voice echoed out from each screen.
"...I didn't know bug data could infect humans because you obviously have some screws loose if you think for a second I would let myself get assimilated...that is the same as perishing here...and I have no intention to do either..."But truth be told B.o.B. needed a moment to recuperate and focus on fixing its arm. B.o.B. placed is left hand out and it shown a dim blue light. A sphere appeared in the air in front of B.o.B. It slowly dropped to the ground and just before touching down, eight legs popped out and propped it up. B.o.B. touched it and its form shifted, opening up to become a small chair. B.o.B. hoisted itself into the seat and the spider like drone sprinted down the hall. Moving much faster than B.o.B. could on its two legs.[5/10]
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 3, 2014 18:02:48 GMT -8
~I-Am-Rosetta~
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Rosetta’s eyes strayed.
“Screws loose?” she murmured, “Possible.”
The monitors had no errors, but yet the young woman’s body was still for greater than a moment. It was as if she was contemplating what she was doing, but yet, something was driving her! A desire to make amends, do better than what she had done for people, and perhaps even noble intention. All of it was lost however in the meaning of her actions. The answers that were in her eyes vanished as she lifted her head, looking towards the display with the glare returning to her lenses from the screen.
“Very well,” her strong but empty voice returning, “We will not insult you further. My friend shall stop restraining her data.”
*Rumble!*
There was a gentle quake for only a second...
*RUMBLE!!*
Another that felt like the strike of thunder...
*RUMBLE!!!*
The last quake not parallel to any other as the halls bounced up and down as if the hands of God treated the foundation like a salt shaker. The next corner B.O.B. would turn would not be like others. The end of the hall was clean and clear, free of an encroaching bug accumulation, but yet there it was concentrated in one circular spot. In that spot, Nu had stood in full form from head to toe. The only thing different was the saliva that escaped from her teeth and seeped to her jaw’s front as she smiled.
“Now, initiate the Viral Amensalism...”
At the end of the hall, Nu’s very belly begun to bulge and expand as if something was emerging from it. Slowly, it became more round and stretched her until eventually it opened up with square like parting of hrt stomach that made it seem like teeth were at her torso. Above the top, two beady openings had a pale yellow light. At first, they seemed to look agitated, but...they seemed in agony. Reflecting pain as its mouth opened with a wailing screech that could be defined as a depressing scrape of rusted metal on metal.
The opening at Nu’s stomach cavity emitted a bright glow of red and yellow from the absorbed Volgear virus’s mouth. As the screech continued to emit down the hallway in the direction of B.O.B. and his chariot, the hall’s temperature started to rise in haste as suddenly the thing that drowned out the screeching sirens and the decrepit screeching was the eruption of flames that blew from areas all around the halls. From top to bottom, one corner of the room to the next, and from left to right with all of them vice versa; the hall became a chaotic burst of bee flames that drowned B.O.B.’s path making it difficult to cross.
Of course, there were openings, and it either meant they were toying with him or it was not their best control.
“Please surrender,” Rosetta hinted with her beckoning sorrow as the edges of the openings were the flames emitted had eroded data and fragments of bugs. “Not even I, as a scientist, want to know what these flames may do to you.”
The fires were hot...but some cold? Others coursed with a strange static electrical disturbance, and some even soaked the terrain. The unusual bug properties gave the flames form, but their effects were beyond logic.
Something that aroused Rosetta’s curiosity, but also her fear to know.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
Now Playing: ”Wiping All Out” from Persona 3: OST Chatty Ditz: ---- Post Number: S.I.X.
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 3, 2014 18:33:36 GMT -8
B.o.B. turned the corner, and to its surprise there was the lobby entrance to the building, but also the strange infiltrator program...
"dinkit...I'm running out of time..."
And then the building itself shook..."!!!..."B.o.B.'s spider absorbed the shock as best it could, attempting to keep itself stable...and B.o.B. watched silently as Nu began to transom. The hallway and lobby were doused in bizarre flames each with their own properties blocking B.o.B's escape, but that wasn't B.o.B's plan...B.o.B:"I think we have grown close enough for you to know that I don't give up that easy little miss...And don't worry you wont have to..."
A small click and the orange ring around B.o.B's right gauntlet lit back up, B.o.B' could feel its right arm again.
"...But as I said before I am terribly sorry for you see...I'm late...I'm late! For a very important date!"As B.o.B. jumped off the spider drone up towards the ceiling with its right arm out stretched. When its hand touched a small square hole opened up, then using its left hand it quickly grabbed the ledge and hoisted itself up.
B.o.B. stuck its head out the hole,
B.o.B.:"Go get 'er boy!"
The spider drone closing back up, and raced towards Nu. Not caring for its safety braving through the fires with little regards to their effects. It jumped at Nu pointing its sharp legs to pierce her body.
All the while B.o.B. began to run up the building again.
"So close...Just keep moving...almost there..."[6/10]
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 3, 2014 21:42:58 GMT -8
~I-Am-Rosetta~
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Rosetta lifted a brow.
The NetNavi had made a hasty escape. Nu was left contending to the strange spider being(thingy?). With the maw of her mutated body closing and her form returning to normal. Nu had drawn her right hand before her, and extending from her open palm was the tip of what seemed like a pink sword. With a deadlock of the spider’s pointed legs with the blade. Nu exhibited its ability to cut more than into flesh...but also leaving a mark with the corrosive data that ran rampant through her.
“Nu-chan, we have no time to play.”
The blob girl heard this and had taken a slow step back. While doing so, the other leg reached forth as her body stretched and torn down the middle of her chest dividing her into two halves. Both halves had formed all which was proper: a second leg, arm, and even a makeshift core so they matched to some extent. Snickering, the double behind the sword-wielding duplicate reached her hand upward as it reached for the opening in the roof and pulled herself upward as her arm retracted.
“A strange date?” Rosetta shifted her head from left to right shoulder, “Curioser and curioser...”
As Nu had leaped to the next level, it only a sound listen of the ear as she lifted her hand to the side of her head. At first, it was playful; then she pressed her head into the building hearing all like an echo as she infused her being with the wall. Ignoring the non-relative to the hunt, she had pulled her head back, snickering, as she felt she had a trail on the strange NetNavi. With each passing of her enormous size through halls and walls of the facility, the rooms twisted. Any normal NetNavi would think they would be the shenanigans of a drug or side-effect. However, it was much worse!
“I do wish you luck on your goal,” Rosetta bid to the NetNavi through the audio of the building, “Because it’s not going to be that easy to escape the strain of the network now that Nu has uncompressed her data.”
Moving her body through the walls once more, Nu hunted the NetNavi while Rosetta watched on as if this was simply sport. The halls twisted and the bugs with their rounded being flew around the facility environment in a very unstable manner as they could pummel anyone passing by or even cling on to their unfortunate target. Even as Nu passed through the walls and flooring hunting B.O.B., she felt stings and burns from the many sickly statuses she accumulated and it was slowing her down.
Before her body succumbs to her fatigue, she would indeed feast! She was sure of this.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
Now Playing: ”Wiping All Out” from Persona 3: OST Chatty Ditz: ---- Post Number: S.E.V.E.N..
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 3, 2014 22:47:06 GMT -8
The BosDrone having taken heavy damage and delayed Nu had fulfilled its purpose. With only on thing left to do. EXPLODE!
*KRakABOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!!*
The drone became a whit conflagration of light! The force of the explosion blew out the entire ground floor, extinguishing the fires and blowing out all the windows and doors of the first floor."...bought myself some time...but will it be enough..."B.o.B. could feel the building itself quiver from the explosion bellow. Whoever had designed this particular structure should take great pride in it. As it was now going through the stresses of a small war zone, and it still stood some how.B.o.B:"..."
B.o.B. paid no mind to Rosseta's words, they meant nothing to it. She would get her just dessert for underestimating B.o.B. So B.o.B. continued to move up the building making sporadic turns and occasionally making a passage up to the next floor with its right hand. Whenever there was an opening in the spreading bug infection.
"Come on! Come on! where is it!?"[7/10]
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 3, 2014 23:37:37 GMT -8
~I-Am-Rosetta~
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“You’re making a mess of things. No Net Operator?”
She inferred this amidst the explosion. Whether she got an answer or not, it did not matter as she stuck to her bias.
“You’re just a NetNavi,” Rosetta continued on even as Nu hunted for B.O.B, “Your primary function is nothing more than to navigate for the purpose of other programs. If such a program became rogue and negates it’s purpose...well...they become problems. There has seldom been few stories when a rogue NetNavi has done any good for society. Take from the books the Auto Navi or even the proto-type to the internet. Might I add you that both had roles in a previous net crisis during the last Century? It’s better to let Nu assimilate you and make good use of your abilities.”
She was talking...long winded. Wait? Talking?
It was not Rosetta’s thing, especially as a scientist. As her words dragged out to becoming a depressing lecture, the bugs multiplied and became more rapid in their movement. The room became more distorted and even some of the square tiles of the lab became a mixture of chaotic panels. There were some magnetized, others searing hot, and not to mention by the touch of a bug there was one rippled like water. With her adjusting her glasses by the rim, Rosetta cleared her throat as she finished her speech.
“But enough of that,” she hasted, “Nu is probably ready to eat right now.”
*BOOM!!!*
There was an explosion from the building once again, but this time, from the interior of the room. The bugs and debris from the walls were sent flying about the room B.O.B was within and around the source was a ring of fire. The blaze spread across the floor and scattered the vision of the room. It took moments for the dust to settle as it revealed the most monstrous site within the opening. A spiky virus stood three times the size of any normal statured NetNavi. Yet, the beast was pink in its color with a nuclei in the center of its transparented body. From its devilish snarl, it shown its fangs, and two times over as in B.O.B.’s presence, the form of the beast mutated while it stepped forth. Two more heads sprouting from the base of its neck, it let out a ghastly howl from all three of its heads.
“So it’s Cerberus form, huh?” Rosetta smiled somewhat amused by Nu’s antics this time, “I guess it’s proper. Do what you must.”
As if on cue, the beast stepped forth as all three of its heads taken in a deep breath. With a fully collected ball of flame in each mouth, all three of the heads shot forth separate blasts of green fire that was laced with the strange data.
Clearly, they aimed to incinerate the NetNavi where he stood.
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
Now Playing: ”Wiping All Out” from Persona 3: OST Chatty Ditz: ---- Post Number: E.I.G.H.T..
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 3, 2014 23:56:59 GMT -8
"...don't let her get to you...GUY just gives you more freedom then most..."
*BOOM!!!*
B.o.B. raised its arms to block the oncoming shrapnel, and when it lowered them things only got worse...What lay before B.o.B. was a monstrosity. Fire spreading across the ground...B.o.B:"...so close..."
B.o.B. mumbled as the beast stepped into the room, but that wasn't what grabbed B.o.B's attention the most. Behind the abomination was a door, and above that door was a small dimly lit red sign.
And that beautiful sign read 'ROOF ACCESSES'
"Yes!!!"
B.o.B. snapped back into reality as Nu's beastly heads inhaled, and without hesitation B.o.B. sprinted towards the monster at full tilt. As Nu' breathed her foul flames B.o.B. dove underneath them and her hulking figure. Sliding and then springing up to the door.
B.o.B. tore the door open.
B.o.B.:"*Whistle~~~~* Here doggy!" B.o.B. taunted as it ran up the short flight of stairs and onto the roof of the building.[8/10]
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 4, 2014 0:14:04 GMT -8
~I-Am-Rosetta~
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“This guy is pushing the P.E.T to the limits!”
Rosetta’s finger tapped the P.E.T. and the amount of data that was running on the screen. Streams of lines were reflective to what was weighing down the mutated dog form as Nu was managing a lot of data at once. With a growl, she had even slowly turned and followed B.O.B. up the stairs in big leaps and bounds that compensated for the lack of speed and movements.
*Crack!*
Her massive frame squeezed into the corridor...
*CRUNCH!!*
Bristled fur and ripping jaws tore through the opening doorway...
*CRASH!!!*
One large leap to the roof of the building was all she needed!
Nu’s mutated form did not even spot B.O.B.’s form first, but rather the sky and the eroding building. She did not even give note to the timer nor the building’s status at this point. The blob girl in her mutated form let out more angry growls and snarls before turning around looking for sight of the strange robotic NetNavi. Rosetta resorting to a local video screen as the monitors inside were out of range. Her glare from her glasses missing as she addressed B.O.B. upon scanning the roof.
“This is no good,” she noted, “Nu has the advantage up here. You’re wide out in the open, the building is nearly under her complete control with the spread of bugs, not to mention you barely have room to navigate with this place exploding and Nu is one of the most durable and regenerative programs on the net – equipped the control of my Advanced P.E.T., no less!”
Rosetta shook her head with a confused look upon her face. Even her genius could not piece this tactic together!
“Just what are you trying to accomplish?”
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
Now Playing: ”Wiping All Out” from Persona 3: OST Chatty Ditz: ---- Post Number: N.I.N.E.
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 4, 2014 0:27:12 GMT -8
B.o.B. waited atop the roof for the beast. As it jumped up onto the roof, B.o.B. prepared itself.
"...Just a little more..."B.o.B. needed only a little bit more time and everything would fall into place...Rosseta had yet to suspect anything and it had all gone according to plan...well with a few mishaps.B.o.B:"...Just one thing before you assimilate me... Whats your name?"
B.o.B. said trying to stall for time while edging itself to the ledge of the roof.
"Oh please just give me this last cherry on top!"[9/10]
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 4, 2014 0:39:30 GMT -8
~I-Am-Rosetta~
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“You’ll know that and more,” each head of the Cerberus beast opened once more as Rosetta spoke. The one at the center had gathered a cluster of fire into its mouth while the others had lashed out their tongues. More abnormal than usual, the beasts had their tongues stretch across the roof top and attempt to wrap themselves around B.O.B.’s legs. Most likely an augmentation from Nu’s data rather than the beast’s original traits, “You will know everything when you become a part of Nu!”
The beast had gathered the fire in its center mouth while its body seemed to have a touch of distortion. The fur and body had phased in and out like static, and the bugs that were infesting her were becoming sporadic. The very ground had creaked under the four paws of the beast as it turned a sickly purple and black color with some of the very zeroes and ones rising. Rosetta and Nu both did not care at this point!
This NetNavi was a lot of trouble. Even with analytical skills, it still had led them on a facility wide chase throughout the area, not to mention with incredible display of skill. Rosetta was anxious to absorb him and reap the ability with her P.E.T. and Nu just wanted a good meal to make up for that erasure of data she did not claim for her own. Even as the very facility began to erode away with the sound of cement crumbling to the streets and some pieces of glass still falling from certain spots, it did not matter!
The blob girl would feast and that was all that mattered to her as she finally let out the blast of fire from her mouth that was the size of a Super Nova. Whether her own tongue extensions used to bind the NetNavi was scorched, it did not matter as she felt that she would grow two more. With the processing speed of the NetNavi ingrained into her body, she felt she would have no problem in that department anyway.
"Dinner is served!" The beast snarled upon emitting the blast of fire.
What was he to do now? Nu did not care at this point. She was done playing with her food!
________________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
Now Playing: ”Wiping All Out” from Persona 3: OST Chatty Ditz: ---- Post Number: T.E.N.
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 4, 2014 0:57:59 GMT -8
"Nooooo!!! You stupid girl! I just wanted that final personal touch for this!"
B.o.B:"Don't you know bad guys never win in the end!"
B.o.B. said while jumping up to dodge the grasping tongues. Then landing to turn and sprint to the edge of the building.B.o.B.:"And I have been particularly good recently! Times Up!"B.o.B., pointing to its head, where a beautiful halo now appeared.
The timer on the buildings self destruct was up! Nu, so deeply ingrained in the buildings code with her bugs would be easily dealt with by the force of the explosion. The best part B.o.B. didn't have to use any force itself! The building was all the force B.o.B. would need to defeat this beastly being. From the very depths of the building in a shielded area from the bugs contamination, the self destruct mechanism went off, just as B.o.B. flung itself off the top of the building. A golden barrier encasing it as it plummeted away from both Nu's and the buildings cosmic explosion!
"My extra shiv should be kicking in just about now!...." *tap tap tap* a tiny spider like drone appearing in the lower corner of Rosseta's pet display. It blinked once and then...Rosseta's screen would go dark. The PET super heating and then sparking. Depriving Rosseta the results of the final conflict. [10/10]
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 4, 2014 0:59:39 GMT -8
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Post by Snakeskin on Dec 4, 2014 13:37:02 GMT -8
Interesting to see a battle where few if any blows were exchanged! On to judgeytiemz...
STYLE: Div, you're still making the same mistakes as in the last battle of yours I judged. To restate: Be careful of run-ons. Your entire last paragraph in the first post is a single sentence and a one-word interjection. Said sentence includes many points; 1: Nu is continuing her work, 2: something is making her grin (the wording is unclear as to what) and she doesn't care about intruders, 3: the room is described in some detail, 4: the light from the computer monitor is the only illumination. Each one of those points really ought to be its own sentence - you might be able to get away with combining two of them, but not all four. It's distracting and somewhat exhausting to read through. That's just the worst example; there are numerous times throughout the battle where you've written in run-ons.
There are also issues with unclear phrasing, often within the run-ons themselves. For example, “but yet to acknowledge seeing that she was one for learning who would be interrupting her now” is a needlessly complicated way of saying “though she was curious who did it.” I appreciate the attempt to add in extra bits of detail and creative wording, but when it impedes understanding it becomes a problem, and that one took me a while to work out. Also, I still have no idea what “it only a sound listen of the ear” is supposed to mean.
There are lots of incorrectly-used words like “flaw” (which is not a verb, you cannot “flaw a plan”), “aligned” (which is not a synonym for “lined”), and “whitewash” (which has many meanings, none of which have an associated sound - I think you may have meant “white noise”). There were a lot of mistakes in tenses as well, like “it only taken seconds” (should be “it only took seconds” or “it had only taken seconds”).
THAT SAID - from time to time you did manage some very nice turns of phrase; I especially liked the bit where you compared Rosetta to a master about to unleash an angry dog. Overall I got the same impression here as I did in your battle against Midas - you're clearly trying and I applaud the effort, but your posts tend to be hard to follow. As such, I'm giving you the same score here as I did in that battle.
As for you B.o.B. - you actually made a lot of the same mistakes, albeit far fewer of them. There are several places where you use run-on sentences yourself, though most of your cases could be resolved with added commas or dashes and some simple rephrasing - i.e., “The room was much darker now only lit by the dim emergency lights and the computer monitor, now showing the face of a girl who now addressed B.o.B.” Ironically there are more places where what should be a single sentence is needlessly split into two or three; for example - For example: “As B.o.B. ran down the hallways the building began to creak and moan. The bug data infecting its structure, and twisting and stretching pieces.” The second sentence is not a complete thought and should be combined with the first. There were also some problems with tenses.
With all that in mind, your posts were still much easier to understand and read through than Div's. I also appreciated the simplicity of the formatting and the way B.o.B.'s thoughts and dialogue were given distinct colors - though transitions in and out of dialogue got sloppy here and there.
Div: 7 / 30 Bob: 22 / 30
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ARTICULATION:
As usual, Div, you were very descriptive. While it's often jumbled you do take care to try and describe more or less everything relevant to the post along with quite a bit of extra detail. Can't fault you there, since the issues with writing style and comprehensibility are covered in the above score.
B.o.B., you definitely didn't have as much description, but you did have enough that your posts never felt lacking or overly-dry. Some people tend to describe nothing but the actions their characters take, which is thankfully not a trap either of you fell into.
Div: 17 / 20 Bob: 14 / 20
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BALANCE:
This section is a bit tricky since you guys didn't even hit each other, save B.o.B. bouncing off Nu in the opening. You each relied on ingenuity and creative strategies instead of raw power, which is refreshing. Both of you allowed your navis to become impeded by the chaos erupting within the building, and since neither of you directly hit one another the (tiny) version difference doesn't really even come into play.
I will say, however, that I'm not clear on how Rosetta managed to place all the bugs into the building's code after she'd been disconnected from it. Div, if you had written in some sort of hacking procedure or explanation I might be fine with it - but outside of some static you basically ignored the fact that he'd locked her out. Considering that this bugginess is then the main strategy used for the rest of the battle I must admit it annoys me somewhat. That said, I'm ALSO not sure how B.o.B. managed to infect Rosetta's PET - but since it had no real impact on the actual battle, it's less of a transgression in my eyes. Either way you both did pretty well here.
Div: 17 / 20 B.o.B.: 19 / 20
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LENGTH:
Here's one place I definitely think you've improved, Div. Your posts are still quite a bit longer than average, but in this battle I didn't see you wasting a lot of time on tangents and irrelevant material. There was also much less repetition than I've seen from you before. Almost everything in your posts served an identifiable purpose, so you score well here.
B.o.B., your posts were much shorter, but the Length score for me isn't about how much text there is but how well it's used and whether the length fits the content - and in your case, I think it does. You covered everything you needed to and almost nothing really wound up feeling abrupt or long-winded.
Div: 9 / 10 B.o.B.: 9 / 10
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EMOTION:
You both did really well here, too! Nu doesn't have much of a personality, but that's a character trait and doesn't count against you, Div. Besides, you made up for it with Rosetta, who was really quite interesting. I definitely appreciated you taking the time to give us a glimpse at her thought processes, especially in the moments where she was considering her own (lack of) sanity or trying to convince B.o.B. to surrender.
B.o.B., your dialogue was very fun to read. Ultimately there was less depth than in Div's posts, but a surprising amount of personality was evident in your descriptions and what little B.o.B. did say aloud. The almost obsessive-compulsive bit towards the beginning when the bug data appeared was really nice. Good job to you both!
Div: 9 / 10 B.o.B.: 9 / 10
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JUDGE POINTS:
From me, this is just an average of your scores in previous sections.
Div: 7 / 10 B.o.B.: 8 / 10
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Note that Div gets an extra 5 points added to his score from the Version Bonus setting, however, this is only used in determining the winner of the match and does not affect the letter rank.
FINAL SCORES: Div: 66 (71 with Version Bonus) (B Rank) B.o.B.: 81 (A Rank)
B.o.B. WINS
145 EXP / 1,450z for B.o.B. (Before any Type or token modifiers you may have) 75 EXP / 750z for Nu (Before any Type or token modifiers you may have)
Keep in mind you can each earn an extra 5 EXP and 50z if you make final posts showing the end of the battle!
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Post by B.o.B. on Dec 4, 2014 17:37:35 GMT -8
B.o.B:"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!"
*CRASH!* The barrier protecting B.o.B. shattering on impact, absorbing little of the force.B.o.B.:".....nnnnnggghhhhh......"B.o.B. moaned, rolling over in the dirt to watch the explosion consume the building. The building made a loud creak as it began to crumble completely to the ground. Bits and pieces of flaming ruble coming down like a small rain shower.
"...I can't believe that worked..." B.o.B. sat up, and watched the flames burn in a beautiful light show that reflected off B.o.B.'s face plate. Dusting itself off B.o.B. strained to stand up, completely exhausted from this battle.B.o.B.:"Hopefully we don't run into each other again...aaagghh!...tss..."
B.o.B.'s body was covered in damage and standing was an annoyance, but B.o.B. turned and dragged itself away anyways-to nurse its wounds for the inevitable skirmishes in the future in the crazy world called the net.... [FIN]Thanks Snakeskin, only you got the version bonus backwards, B.o.B. is the higher version- "the Navi with the higher story version has 5 points added onto their final battle score per version they are above their opponent" So my actual exp/zenny should be 125/1250(base:40/400-10/100'battle against lower version'+40/400'A Rank'+55/550'posts per person'=125/1250*+5/50'for finishing') 130/1300x 4/4.35= 520/5655
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