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Post by "Bill" on Jul 27, 2010 8:02:34 GMT -8
*Embera looked as Zero left, and smiled*
Embera: Lord NapalmMan....knows how to pick 'em well. Little does that swordsman know....I couldn't have done anything if he stayed....Oh well....leaving is a forfeit....
*The clones melt away and Embera falls back, unconscious, injured and charred, but with a smile on her face.*
(Embera victory?)
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Post by Zero on Jul 27, 2010 8:05:34 GMT -8
(OOC: Sure XD It's freestyle, so we'll worry more about that when it's single-judge. GF, WP :D)
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Post by stefjenova on Jul 27, 2010 8:41:23 GMT -8
Grading:
Style [28/30]: The general RP is very well done between both of you. I have very few complaints here. If you want a specific critique of your RP style, PM me for details afterwards, but I'm very satisfied with what I see here.
Articulation [18/20]: For the most part very clear what's going on here.
Balance [18/20]: For an even-strength fight, mostly very balanced. Jess, I think ya need to tone it back just a teensy bit, but mostly very well done.
Length [9/10]: Zero, I believe you scaled both post length and emotion quite beautifully as the fight went on, and I gotta say, I missed reading your RP in the time you've been gone. Jess, you seemed to stay constant length, which is ok, but it almost felt like you were going through the motions slightly. Don't be afraid to expand the description a little; seemed like the focus was on the words and the actions got dusted.
Emotion [9/10]: You both did a very fair job on emotion. Again, very few complaints here.
Judge Points: Feel/Flow [9/10]: I think you guys had a very good flow to the fight, both emotionally and in reacting to the other's comments and actions. Epicness seemed well held in check and all in all I can't wait to see the rematch.
Final Score: 91/100 Letter Grade: A Rank Bonus: +15/+150
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Post by "Bill" on Jul 27, 2010 8:44:58 GMT -8
Embera: 45/450 (Resource x2) 90/900 Zero: 45/450
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