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Post by Xypher on Dec 20, 2015 13:38:45 GMT -8
ALRIGHTY,IM FIRED UP AFTER THAT BATTLE! Let's get right down too it!
Style: H: 29/30 F: 27/30
Overall, very good job! a few grammar things, here and there, but otherwise Pretty well done! Ful, I am impressed with the improvements with general RP!
Articulation: H: 19/20 F: 17/20
Heatman had the advantage with the descriptions here. I could visualize the battle coming from Heatman. However, Ful, the way you have utilized Fulgar in an RP battle always has surprise or two.
Balance H: 20/20 F: 18/20 I thought it was pretty well balanced. My only thing here, Ful, is you had your last attack miss, s almost in defeat. To me, Div should have responded to that first. Otherwise, plenty of damage given all around.
Length: H: 10/10 F: 9/10 Again, that last post: Could have used a bit more Ful. I like Fulgar. I want to see more of him. More about his thoughts, and skills. I like what I see. Div, I love your incarnation of Heatman. Using the Original Heatman in this fashion is a great read!
Emotion: H: 10/10 F:10/10 Well done, both sides!
JP: H: 10/10 F: 10/10
Final Scores: H 98/100 F 91/100
If you have any questions or anything, PM me and we can discuss. GREAT BATTLE
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 21, 2015 19:37:27 GMT -8
+++HeatMan.EXE+++
“Baby one, two, three! Get that referee!” _______________________________________________________
It was a nice hit...
The moment the Heat Wave passed over the field, scorching everything in its path, was the same moment when HeatMan's gauntlets had opened to intercept the coursing path of electricity. It stung like the sharpest crackle of fire that would scorch the skin, and he knew fire well, but yet, it was not enough to bring him down. The Heat Wave nullified a good deal of damage, leaving HeatMan to sit with a slight twitch and tinge as he reached his palm out, pointing to Fulgur who was blasted by his attack.
His concern followed suit.
"My apologies..." he began, "I got a little heated there. I didn't even-....didn't even put up a proper defense."
It was true, the fiery NetNavi had been damaged a great deal. This lesson and others for today was clearly over. He looked to Fulgur, waiting, hoping, he would respond after dealing out so much damage. His beady eyes burned with the faint traces of his flame hoping that the NetNavi would recover.
It would have to be a lot to explain to any doctor that he overdid it with a Netbattle, an it would look bad as a teacher!
______________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
Post: Outro (1) Now Playing: ---- Chatty Ditz: ---
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Post by Hellbreaker on Dec 21, 2015 21:20:02 GMT -8
Fulgur panted, both from pain and heat. This hurt,this hurt, THIS HURT!!!!Shuddering,the young navi hears Heatman and blinks. The fiery navi shouldn't feel guilty....Ful had known what he was getting into, had seen what Heatman could do!!
He tries to sit up, but fails. Even if the boy wasn't too weak to move in his heavy armor, the heat had fused some of the sections together...yay.This would be fun..Sighing, he switches out to his casual clothing, hissing as the air meets his scalded skin.Owwwwwwwwww...
Doing his best to ignore it, Fulgur sits, then amazingly enough stands, grinning reassuringly as he tries for a thumbs up."D-d-don't worry...I-I-I'm a o-ok..." Falling to his knee, the young navi blinks as he weaves in place, shaking his head to refocus.."Uh....s-s-sir...just curious....B-but are you using s-some sort of clone program?"Maybe that's why he was seeing multiple versions of him....
Outro 1
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 21, 2015 23:42:34 GMT -8
+++HeatMan.EXE+++
“Baby one, two, three! Get that referee!” _______________________________________________________
HeatMan sighed as he raised his right gauntlet. At cue, the surrounding spectators that had kept to the sides til now went into action. The came in hordes as they had their own special thick yellow blankets. "No, and you're probably having a heat stroke. so, that's why some of my best students understand the routine at this time."
The students Navis flockered all over Fulgur. Gently, they tossed the sheets, and crowded around him like subjects would do so for a king. That was how HeatMan treated his opponents this way. With that, he turned his box shaped body around and begun to hover away.
Good luck, next time, Navi! This lesson has...tired me out...
______________________________________________________ “Because he can get that knockout!”
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Post by Hellbreaker on Dec 22, 2015 7:01:13 GMT -8
Fulgur blinks."Oh....."Well...that was unfortunate...Tilting his head as the navis surround him, he watches as Heatman begins to go away."O-ok, s-sir...Thank you for the battle, i-it was a-a-an honor....R-r-rest well."The young navi yawns. He was worn out himself...Scanning through his knowledge Ful nods.He should be OK to rest...the young navi leans against a nearby student, and drifts off, recovering his energy so he could heal himself...
Outro 2
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Post by ~Divine|<3|Heart~ on Dec 22, 2015 19:05:50 GMT -8
Summary: Eights Posts Per Player: 80XP/800z Rank A (HeatMan & Victory) 40XP/400z + 40XP/400z (80XP/800z) Rank A (Fulgur & Defeat) 40XP/400z + 10XP/100z (50XP/500z) Finish Posts: 5XP/50z Raven Multiplier: x2
Totals: 330XP/3,300z (HeatMan) 270XP/2,700z (Fulgur)
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Post by Hellbreaker on Dec 22, 2015 19:26:30 GMT -8
(Thanks for adding it up, Div!! Wasn't sure if we or the judge did!! And great battle, it was real fun!!^^)
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